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Band 6.5

The map below shows university sports courts in 1990 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The map compares the sports courts in the university between 1990 and
present
Correct article usage
the present
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 day.
Overall
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, now half of the courts are covered by a building,
whereas
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 before
this
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 territory was an
open air
Use the right word
open-air
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.
Also
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, new facilities like
basketball
Correct article usage
a basketball
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court
Use synonyms
 and
fitness
Correct article usage
a fitness
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 centre were established.
However
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, in 1990 there were a park and
car
Correct article usage
a car
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 park which
now are
Verb problem
apply
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no longer
existing
Replace the word
exist
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. In both years there
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 a cafe and a reception which didn't change their location.
Linking Words
Also
Add a comma
Also,
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 there was an outdoor pool in 1990
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 was transformed into an indoor pool in
present
Correct article usage
the present
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 day, because half of the area was covered by
building
Correct article usage
a building
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. Another thing the position of
changing
Correct article usage
the changing
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 room was changed
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 it increased in size, so now it is in front of the indoor pool. A tennis
court
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 was replaced by the fitness
center
Change the spelling
centre
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Punctuation problem
, and
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and
Correct word choice
which
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 was at
this
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 place in 1990 and is now located outdoors. Half of the territory is now in the open air, but some renovations were made.The Basketball
court
Use synonyms
 replaced the park
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 the tennis
court
Use synonyms
 moved from the right
corner
Punctuation problem
corner,
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 where it was in
1990
Punctuation problem
1990,
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 to the left corner and became two times
larger
Correct word choice
large
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words court with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • facilities
  • diversified infrastructure
  • accessibility
  • expansion
  • investment
  • indoors fitness activities
  • modern health trends
  • transformation
  • commitment
  • sportsmanship
  • competitive sports culture
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