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Some schools are very strict about uniform while others have very relaxed dress code. What are the advantages n and disadvantages of this.

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 schools have a
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strict code involving
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 uniform for students, which has sparked some mixed opinions
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 a professional work space
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 it is necessary for students to look presentable
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 feel they can have the freedom of choosing by themselves. In
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 day and age
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 community is striving to achieve success, but how does one contain that without looking their sharpest
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 at school, in Saudia arabia
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 are encouraged to wear
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 going to work, meeting, etc, and that makes our country taken
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seriously

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task response
To fix task response, give a clear view: say if you think strict uniform is good or bad, then name two pros and two cons and give a short reason.
coherence
To improve flow, use simple linking words like 'also', 'but', 'so', 'however' to move from one idea to the next.
content
There is some idea that a neat look matters at school.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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