Q. In some countries, celebrities complain about the way the media publicizes their private lives. Some people say that they should accept it as part of their fame. Do you agree or disagree?

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, fame has been
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described
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some kind
of curse by celebrities and
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complain about how
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their private
lives get ambushed by
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paparazzi
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some think they should just accept
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as part of the package, but
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not fair to them. Modern technology has taken stalking people to the next level, with cameras that zoom into peoples homes and gardens it realy no wonder why celebrities hate being famous, the amount of fear they must have for their children is just incomprehensible, their childhood must be like hell because they dont get a say on much and cant even go to a normal school because they will get overwhelmed by kids asking if their parents are famous, the fact is fame is a dream for simple minded people because they dont get to see they struggles they deal with from paparazzi. Celebrities go from A list to D list
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are known worldwide
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some get
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in a supermarket from time to time
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problem with being well known around the globe is invasion
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privacy
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types of people are entitled to privacy in their own homes
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disrupted by our community is
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absolutely
disgusting. In conclusion, famous or not
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is deserving of some privacy in their house or walking by the
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streets
of New York,
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a shame that our community has
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stalking.

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task response
State a clear view at the start and keep to it. Present main points in a simple order and check they fit the task.
content
The idea of privacy is clear and constant.
structure
There is a proper ending that signals the wrap up.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • right to privacy
  • media intrusion
  • mental health
  • family life
  • set boundaries
  • legal means
  • protect privacy
  • social media
  • personal narrative
  • freedom of the press
  • ethical journalism
  • sensationalism
  • public scrutiny
  • public interest
  • prurient curiosity
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