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Artificial intelligence is good in the teaching field. To what extent do you agree with this?

In
contemporary
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the contemporary
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 world the artificial intelligence
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plays
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vital
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a vital
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 role in
teaching
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the teaching
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 field. Some critics point out
it
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that it
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 is a good
teacher
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. In my opinion, though it is good in the teaching field, as it
most
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is most
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convineint
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convenient
 for
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student
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students
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,
but
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apply
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it cannot replace the physical
teacher
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. To
begine
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begin
, earlier the pupils were completely
depend
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dependent
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 on the school, where a
teacher
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 was a guide for the
student
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. They taught each
individal
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individual
 and transformed their lives.
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, the students go to school and get knowledge from them
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;
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 they
were leading
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lead
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 and
directing
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direct
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 the
learner
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learners
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,
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apply
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 by pointing
their
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out their
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 mistakes.
However
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, with the change of time the modern technology over
take
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overtaken
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 the education system,
raised
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raising
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 various platforms. These platforms become a vast
sourceses
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source
 of information.
hence
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 more and more
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student
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students
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relay
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rely
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of
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on
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 it.
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 the present generation
use
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uses
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artifical intelegence
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artificial intelligence
 for
each
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apply
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and
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apply
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evey
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every
 information.
On the contrary
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, the critics point out, the dependency
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 it is very high. The main reason is
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vast knowledge is available
straight forward
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straightforwardly
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, which crippled the youngster
to think
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from thinking
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,
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apply
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 or
process any things
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processing anything
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.
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 , earlier to gain
knowledged
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knowledge
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, one
have
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has
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 to visit
library
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the library
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, search many books, make notes and
then
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 come to
conclusion
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a conclusion
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. Though it was a long
process
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process,
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 it had permanent memory, and
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student
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the student
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 had
excellent
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an excellent
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 foundation. In conclusion, though artificial
intellegence
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intelligence
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apply
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is
most
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the most
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 suitable, feasible method for
the
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apply
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students in education,
but
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apply
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it
just
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apply
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cannot replace the presence of
physical
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a physical
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teacher
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.
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Hence
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Hence,
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 it can be used as a research or a guide with the physical
teacher
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.

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grammar
Fix spelling and grammar to make your meaning clear.
structure
Make a clear plan before you write. Start with a statement of your view.
coherence
Write a clear topic sentence for each paragraph.
content
Give one or two real and simple examples to show your point.
content
The essay shows a view and tries to compare old and new styles.
structure
There is a basic plan with an intro and a conclusion.
content
The idea to use examples is good.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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