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the line graph shows the wheat export of canada , austarlia and european countries

‏The line graph illustrates
how
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much quantity of
wheat
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export
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of
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 three different countries (Australia,
Canada
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 and
European
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the European
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community
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Community
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) over the five-year period. ‏
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, the
wheat
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export
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 of both
Canada
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 and Australia experienced a
sligtly
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slight
 decrease over the period
but
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 with
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Canada
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Canada,
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 there
was
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 some fluctuations. The European Community saw a
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considerable
 upward trend in the
wheat
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 exports. ‏In 1985, the
export
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 of
wheat
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 from
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canada
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Canada
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had
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was
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 20
million
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 tons
with
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, with
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highest
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the highest
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exportion
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exportation
 compared to Australia at 15
million
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 tonnes and
Eurooean
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Europe
 at nearly
to
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17
million
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 tonnes.
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Canada
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Canada's
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export
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exports
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 had a
slightly decreased
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at
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 around 18
in
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million in
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 1986
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,
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and
then
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 the trend rose significantly and reached
to
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the
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a
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 peak
at
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of
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 25
million
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 in 1988
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. Then
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then
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then,
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 the trend declined sharply
in1989
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in 1989
and
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 it recovered to nearly 17
million
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 in 1990.
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,
The
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 European declined and
then
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 remained steady until 1988 at 15
million
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then
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 it climbed significantly
at
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to
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 22
in
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million in
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 1990. ‏
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, the blue line went in
opposite
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the opposite
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 direction. It
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stepped
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 gradually
at
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amlost
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almost
 17
million
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 in 1996. After that, despite
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falling
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fallen
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 sharply until 1990.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, export, canada, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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