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the chart shows that male and female teacheres in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010

The given bar graph illustrates the men and
women
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 teachers in six different types of educational locations in the United Kingdom (2010) and
does
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makes
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 relevant
comparisions
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comparisons
. 
Overall
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, it is shown that nursery/pre-
school
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 and primary
school
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 were the highest proportion for
women
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according to
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graph
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the graph
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.
However
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, these categories are the least among men
and
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, and
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 male students studying at university is the
the biggest
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 number
in
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this
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 year. The
women
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went
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who went
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 to the nursery/pre-
school
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 is almost 100%
although
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,
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apply
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 the
women
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that
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who
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 have gone to the university is the least
around
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, around
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 30% which is significantly less
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compared
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 to men that gone to the university
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, which
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 is almost 65% in 2010. The second highest amount is primary
school
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 (90%). And the rest of the categories are secondary
school
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, a
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little less the 60%, college and private training institute
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 almost 45% respectively.
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, over 60% of the male students
studyed
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studied
 in universities
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whereas
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,
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 the least proportion
in
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was in
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 nursery/pre-
school
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 and primary
school
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a
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, a
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little above 0% for both.
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, secondary
school
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, college and private training institutes stood
in
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at
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 between 40 to 60
percent
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per cent
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 in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational setting
  • gender disparity
  • workforce distribution
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • further education
  • higher education
  • adult education
  • trends
  • implications
  • representation
  • gender roles
  • societal views
  • significant differences
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