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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

It is often claimed that
vehicles
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 all around the world will turn out to be
driverless
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 in the coming few years, and there will be only passengers inside these
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. I would
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contend
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 that the advantages of automated
vehicles
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outweight
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outweigh
 the drawbacks.
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 is mainly because a wider range of
people
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 may have access to driving, and it can lead to fewer vehicle problems.
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 with, one of the primary advantages of
this
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 development is that widespread self-driving
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 can enable some
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,
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 as disabled and elderly
individuals
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individuals,
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 to use automobiles without any assistance.
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, they cannot have any
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to drive
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 long
distance
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distances
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.
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,
driverless
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vehicles
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 may
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 be considered
as
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a benefit because
people
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 can complete other tasks or engage in more useful activities,
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 as reading
instead
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 of driving.
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, another benefit is that the mistakes
people
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 make can be overcome through automated
cars
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.
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, most
people
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 can cause
traffics
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traffic
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 on the
roads
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 through their reckless driving, and by using
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the wrong
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 locations.
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,
driverless
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cars
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, buses, and even trucks can reduce these potential problems to
certain
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a certain
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 extent. Their connection with other self-driving
vehicles
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 may lead to
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 reduction
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the
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speed
level
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, and these types of
cars
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 may even use other
roads
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 in order to avoid traffic on the
roads
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. In conclusion, I believe that the advantages of
driverless
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cars
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, buses, and trucks exceed the setbacks because
this
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 development can allow another group of
people
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 who are disabled or older to drive.
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, it would
also
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 be
better
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a better
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 approach in order to reduce traffic issues on the
roads
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.

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structure
Plan your essay. Say your view in the first line and then give 2 clear ideas with links.
coherence
Keep one idea in each paragraph. Use simple links to connect ideas.
grammar
Fix big grammar and word use. Use correct forms like 'long distances' and 'traffic'.
lexical resource
Use clear examples and explain how they back your point.
task response
A clear view is shown on driverless cars.
coherence
The essay gives ideas about how it helps disabled people and traffic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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