The bar charts show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two bar diagrams show different underlying causes of
study
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in a population of
students
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grouped by
age
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and
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, and
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the support received by each
age
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group from employers. At
young
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a young
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age
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age,
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people mostly
study
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for their
carrees
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careers
and, at
this
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time, they receive most
part
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apply
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of the support from the employers. People aged less than 26
years
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have the maximum
reason
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of
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for studying
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study
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for
career
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a career
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reaching
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, reaching
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almost 80%. At the same
age
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interest
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, interest
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was the
reason
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for
study
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in only 10%. Oppositely, 70% of
students
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aged over 49
years
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study
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for interest reasons. From an
overall
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view
career
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, career
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is the predominant
reason
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for
study
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until 39
years
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. People aged 40-49
years
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have equal reasons. Oppositely,
students
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aged over 49
years
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have a predominant interest
reason
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for
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study
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studying
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(in 70%).
On the other hand
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,
students
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aged under 29
years
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and over 49
years
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receive the
maximal
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maximum
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levels of support from the employers. From the second bar
chart
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chart,
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the trend has higher levels under 26
years
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with almost 65,
then
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it progressively decreases reaching a minimum of 35 at 30-39
years
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.
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Therefore
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Therefore,
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the trend progressively increases
reaching
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, reaching
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a
45
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45%
in the population aged over 49
years
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words study, students, age, years, reason with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • age group
  • primary reason
  • career development
  • personal interest
  • enjoyment
  • employer support
  • trends
  • patterns
  • motivation
  • lifelong learning
  • correlation
  • career goals
  • life circumstances
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