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Some people believe that technologies have greatly improved the quality of education, while others argue that it has had a negative impact on students’ learning. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Technology
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 is an important part of education because
technology
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 helps
students
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to
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understand information, but some people say that technologies have a negative impact on
students
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’ education.
This
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 essay will look into
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of using technologies at school.
Firstly
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,
technology
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 can help
students
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 revise information,
gives
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giving them
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opportunity
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the opportunity
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 for more practice.
For example
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, you can use different websites and applications to practice more challenging areas or more difficult tasks.
As a result
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, it can improve
students
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’ learning quality and opportunities to get better grades.
Secondly
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,
students
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 have the possibility to learn online. They can study from home and at their own pace
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 decrease stress levels, which they might feel at school.
Consequently
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,
students
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’ motivation and interest in studies can increase.
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, technologies
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 have some disadvantages.
To begin
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 with, too much screen time and many notifications can distract
students
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 from the learning process.
This
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 can decrease concentration and negatively affect academic achievements.
Also
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, it can weaken
students
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' important skills
such
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 as critical thinking, creativity and problem solving. In conclusion,
technology
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 is a great tool in education if we learn how to use it in
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 right way
but
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, but
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 if it is not used responsibly
it
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, it
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 can negatively affect
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students
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students'
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 learning and life skills. I personally believe
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that

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task
Make your view clear in the last paragraph and sum up the main points.
coherence
Work on flow between ideas. Use clearer links to move from one idea to the next.
grammar
Check for small grammar errors and spelling, especially at the end where the sentence stops.
structure
The essay has an intro, a body and a close.
content
It shows both sides of the topic and gives some examples.
coherence
Link words are used to join ideas.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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