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Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country’s police force or military force, such as the army, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many people today debate whether
women
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 should have the same
roles
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 as
men
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 in the
police
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 or
army
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.
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 some believe these jobs are more suitable for
men
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, others think
women
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 deserve equal chances.
This
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 essay will discuss both sides and explain my opinion. On the one hand, some people argue that
women
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 are not fit for
police
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 or military work because these jobs are physically demanding and dangerous. Soldiers and
police
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 officers often need strong bodies to carry heavy equipment or handle violent situations. Since
men
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 are usually stronger, critics believe they perform better in
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roles
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.
Furthermore
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, these jobs involve high stress and long periods away from home, which some think
women
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 may find harder to manage.
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, many believe
women
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 should have equal
roles
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 because skill is more important than gender. Not every task in the army or
police
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 requires physical strength; many
roles
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 need intelligence, communication, and calm thinking, where
women
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 can perform equally well. Modern technology
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 reduces the need for raw power. In my opinion,
women
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 should be allowed to join these forces as long as they meet the same standards as
men
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. Selection should depend on ability, not gender.
This
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 approach supports fairness and helps build a more equal society. In conclusion,
although
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 some people feel
women
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 are unsuitable
due to
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 physical limits, I strongly believe both
men
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 and
women
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 should have equal opportunities in the
police
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 and military. What truly matters is competence, not gender.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first part and keep it in mind in all parts.
coherence
Make one main idea in each paragraph and use easy links to show how ideas fit.
lexical
Use only simple words from common use and avoid hard words that are not in the top 100.
content
Give one or two small examples to show a point.
structure
Clear plan with an intro, two body parts, and a close.
argument
Fair view of both sides and a clear own view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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