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The chart below shows the different types of goods and services purchased online in Australia, Canada and the United Kingdom in one year. Summaries the the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart provides information about seven different categories of items bought through online methods in Australia,
Canada
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, and the
UK
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.
Overall
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, the United Kingdom excels other countries in internet shopping, by having the highest percentage score in five out of seven types of purchased goods, only falling behind with toys and financial services.
According to
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 the data, toys, food and drinks,
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 financial services, have the lowest performances in terms of online sales, with ratings reaching almost 0% in Australia,
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, and the
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 , respectively.
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, DVDs and videos, compared to the other categories, show mediocre statistics, stating just under 40% in the best performing country (The
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), and around 15% in the worst one (
Canada
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).
On the other hand
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, the remaining products present similar data
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 and show the highest scores.
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, online purchases for books and computer equipment account for 45% of all sales
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 in both
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 and Australia,
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 it is 50% and 65% for the
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 , respectively.
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, expenditure on music in the United Kingdom had the biggest percentage number among all the categories and countries, reaching approximately 70%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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