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The graph below shows the number of tourist a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Thw
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The
 graph below
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the
number
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 of
tourist
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tourists
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 visiting a Caribbean
island
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 between
the
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apply
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2010
,
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apply
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 and 2017.The chart has three lines
wich
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which
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 give
an
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apply
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information about the
visitors
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 and where they stay. In the beginning, the
gray
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grey
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 line
represent
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represents
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 the
visitors
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that
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who
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 stayed
at
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on
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 a cruise ship.The black line
represent
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represents
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 the
tourist
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tourists
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 who stayed on the
island
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 .
Also
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, the third rounded shape line
represent
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represents
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 the total
number
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 of
tourist
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tourists
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.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
travelers
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travellers
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 who stayed on the cruise
shipe
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ship
 was below half a million
at
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in
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 2010.
Furthermore
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,
while
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 time
passing
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passed
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,
thu
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the
 numbers increased till the year of 2017 it
reached
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reaching
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to
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apply
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2
millions
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million
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visitors
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 .
However
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who were
staing
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staying
 on the
island
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at
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in
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 2010 was more than 500
thousands
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thousand
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,
then
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 rose to 1.5 million till the year of 2015.
Moreover
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, the
number
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drops
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dropped
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 in 2016
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then
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and then
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 went back
at
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up in
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 2017.
To sum up
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, the total
number
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 of
travelers
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travellers
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 going to the
Caribean
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Caribbean
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island
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 rose in
regards
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regard
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where
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to where
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 they stayed .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.
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