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Band 4

Some people feel that cities should allow for spaces for graffiti while others feel it should be banned. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some
people
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 feel that cities should allow spaces for
art
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 and graffiti,
while
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other
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others
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 say that it should be banned. In the beginning, every
city
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 in the world has
it is
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its
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 own style and culture, and
people
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 who
lives
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live
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 in each area and side of the
city
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 have their own
desine
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design
 for
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the nighberhood
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nighberhood
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neighbourhood
.For
exaple
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example
, London
city
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,
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apply
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it
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apply
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has
multiable
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a multilingual
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 population with different
background
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backgrounds
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 and they
infelunce
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influence
 the area they live in .
Additionally
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,
art
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 and
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graffics
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graphics
 and culture will be different in every corner.Like, the
chineese
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Chinese neighbourhood
nighberhood
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 .
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Also
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Also,
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 the indian
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nighberhood
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neighbourhood
 and the
arabic
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Arabic
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nighberhood
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neighbourhood
.
Overall
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,
art
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 and
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graffics
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graphics
 will give the streets a good
looking
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look
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 and
somtimes
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sometimes
 it will send a
massage
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message
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for
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 the visitors of the
city
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, some
people
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 feel that
eery
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every
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city
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need
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needs
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 a space for these stories and
art
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.And they asked the government to allow that.
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, some
people
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 feel that the
art
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 and the
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graffics
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graffiti
 should not be allowed on the street , and it should be in proper
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art related
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art-related
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 areas. In my opinion,
i
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I
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 agree that every
city
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 has its beauty and it is culture.
Furthermore
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, streets with
art
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 and
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graffics
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graffiti
 which tell the story of the
city
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 and
it has
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have
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 a meaning would attract visitors and
tourist
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tourists
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. But, it
need
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needs
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 to be
maneged
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managed
 by the government
and
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, and
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 which
area
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areas
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 and
street
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streets
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is
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are
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 allowed to
paint
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be painted
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 on it.
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Also
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 what the artist will paint and what
does
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apply
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it
mean
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means
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.
To sum up
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,
i
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I
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 do agree with the
people
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 in allowing spaces for
art
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 and
artis
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artists
 that will add
a
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apply
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meaning and value to the
city
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.But , restrictions
needed
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are needed
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 as will from the government to prevent any issue .

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planning
Make a clear plan before writing. Start with a short intro that restates the topic and your view. Then give two to three body paragraphs for each side, and end with a brief conclusion that restates your view.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph. Begin each paragraph with a topic sentence that tells the main point. Then add a few sentences to explain with simple facts or examples.
coherence
Use linking words to show the flow from one point to the next (and, but, also, however, for example). This helps the reader see the point you are making.
task response
Be clear about your view in the intro and in the conclusion. Do not change the view in the middle of the essay.
content
Include specific and clear examples. When you name places or events, show why it helps your point.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Simple mistakes can hide good ideas.
process
The essay shows effort to discuss both sides.
content
It uses some concrete examples (cities and neighborhoods).
content
The writer gives a clear opinion at the end.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban art
  • vandalism
  • vibrancy
  • aesthetic
  • decline
  • creative expression
  • cultural asset
  • legal ramifications
  • marginalized groups
  • community engagement
  • ethical considerations
  • gentrification
  • zoning regulations
  • public space
  • civic responsibility
  • curated walls
  • street artists
  • social commentary
  • property rights
  • anti-graffiti coatings
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