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Band 5

Today, many big cities in the world are increasing in size. What are the problems associated with it? What are the solutions to these problems?

Today, many big
cities
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 are getting very large. More
people
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 move to
cities
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 every year.
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 causes many
problems
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. But
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 there are some ways to fix these
problems
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. One big problem is traffic. When
cities
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 grow, there are too many cars on the road.
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 makes
people
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 late for work and school. Another problem is pollution. More
people
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 and cars make the air dirty, which is bad for our health.
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, houses become very expensive. To fix these
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, the government can do several things.
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they should improve public transport. If there are more buses and trains,
people
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 will use cars less.
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 will help with traffic and pollution.
Second,
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the government can build more houses in the suburbs.
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 makes living cheaper for families.
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, they can build schools and jobs in small towns so
people
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 do not have to move to the big city. In conclusion, big
cities
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 have
problems
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 like traffic and high costs.
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, by improving transport and building more houses, we can make life better for everyone.

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coherence
Use more link words to show how each idea connects to the next.
task
Add one more detail or example for each problem and its fix to make your point stronger.
lexical
Try to use only very common words. Some words here may be less common. Keep to simple words.
structure
The essay has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence
You show a plan to solve the problems with steps.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure
  • sustainability
  • affordability
  • pollution
  • public transport
  • urban sprawl
  • habitat loss
  • community cohesion
  • overpopulation
  • traffic congestion
  • social inequality
  • biodiversity
  • green spaces
  • energy efficiency
  • quality of life
  • social services
  • urban planning
  • government policies
  • renewable resources
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