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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. What are the causes of this problem? What measures can be taken to solve this?

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, millions of tons of
meals
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food
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 are wasted all over the planet. Nowadays, wasting
food
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 is becoming an increasingly serious issue. There are several reasons why
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 is happening. In
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 essay, I will discuss the main cause of
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 problem and suggest possible solutions. One main reason why
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 of
food
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is
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waste is
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 happening is the increase
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 overeating. What I mean by
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 is that people who eat their lunch at restaurants or in offices often throw their meals into trash bags after they are full. One possible solution to
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 issue is
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reducing
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 the consumption of
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large
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 portions of meals. By doing
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everyone
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, everyone
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 orders what they need.
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, the
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 of
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 will decrease, and production will
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 decline. Another reason for
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 problem is the falling prices.
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 happens
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 the growth of restaurants and supermarkets. When
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 is cheap, people usually buy more than they need and do not care if they throw some of it away. To solve
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 problem, the government can control
food
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 prices and
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 awareness campaigns about
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waste
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.
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 would help people understand the value of
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 and think before wasting it.
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, the amount of wasted
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 will reduce
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 society will benefit. In conclusion,
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waste
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the waste
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 of
food
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 is mainly caused by overeating and low prices.
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,
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 issue can be reduced if effective measures are taken. With proper action, the situation can improve significantly.

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Add more detail and examples to show how to cut waste at home, school, and in shops.
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Give a clear plan with steps, like 'reduce portion size', 'keep and use leftovers', 'donate extra food'.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should have one main idea and a clear link to the next.
coherence cohesion
Use more simple link words and short, clear sentences to help flow.
strength
You show the problem and give two causes.
strength
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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