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Band 2.5

In the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driveless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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 to the advancement in the
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technology
,the world has become
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 changed in many fields ,so in the future,
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 difference will be more , cars, buses ,and trucks will be driverless. The only passengers will be inside . Transport service would be provided without
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 think advantages outweigh the disadvantages of
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 phenomenon. First and foremost demerits of service without driver transport , increasing unemployment among the people , because
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drivers
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 would lose their
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jobs
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. Drivers
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able
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 to get another job because of some consequences
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, a lack of experience or knowledge
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, many people
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 survive from poverty.
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Canada
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, many individuals working as
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passenger
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drivers
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 all
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them
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lose
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 their
job
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jobs
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,owing to
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the driverless
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 trend
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 On the flip side, driverless driving could be safer and convenient , because it is not only cheaper but
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 faster. As eliminations need to give the salary to drivers and alleviating the chance of distraction
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 driving, these attributes make the service safer rather than any
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 of an accident.
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 a boon for
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passengers
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 and
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the prosperity
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 of employers.

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structure
Plan your essay before you write. Start with a short intro, then two body parts for pro and con, and finish with a clear conclusion that shows your view.
language
Use simple and correct grammar. Check verb forms and sentence order so ideas are easy to read.
content
Give ideas with real support. Explain how the point helps your view and fix any unclear ideas.
content
You raise two good ideas: harm to jobs and safety in driverless cars.
example
You mention an example of Canada, which shows you try to add detail.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • driverless technology
  • human error
  • traffic congestion
  • emissions
  • road safety
  • mobility
  • independence
  • safety concerns
  • hacking
  • technology failures
  • logistics
  • decision-algorithms
  • programming
  • optimization routes
  • fuel efficiency
  • efficiency
  • accessibility
  • elderly and disabled
  • quality of life
  • job creation
  • technology sector
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