19.In some countries, people buy clothes and choose hair styles according to the latest fashion. Why is this happening? Is this a positive or a negative development?

19.In some countries,
people
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buy clothes and choose
hair styles
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hairstyles
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according to
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the
fashion
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trend
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This
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is mainly because of the strong influence of social media, celebrities, and the
fashion
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industry. In my opinion,
this
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trend has both positive and negative aspects, but
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overall
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it can be seen as a positive development if
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follow
fashion
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in a balanced way.
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are several reasons why
people
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are increasingly influenced by
fashion
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.
Firstly
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, social media platforms
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as Instagram, TikTok, and YouTube spread new styles very quickly.
celebrities
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promote certain brands and looks, and many young
people
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want to copy them in order to feel modern and accepted.
Secondly
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,
globalization
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globalisation
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has made
fashion
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more accessible. International brands and online shopping allow
people
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to follow trends from different countries easily.
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,
fashion
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is often linked to identity and to
express
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expressing
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oneself

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task
Your view is clear, but the answer does not fully cover the question. You say the trend is positive, but you do not show much about the negative side.
task
Add a short ending. A simple last sentence to close helps show full answer.
content
Bring in one or two small examples to show the point.
coherence
Your ideas are put in order with 'First, Next, Finally'. Keep this, and add linking words to move from one idea to the next.
coherence
The intro is good but the conclusion is missing. Add a line to sum up.
task response
Clear position is stated early.
coherence
Use of 'First, Next, Finally' shows order.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trends
  • influencers
  • social acceptance
  • self-expression
  • consumer culture
  • fast fashion
  • ethical implications
  • sustainability
  • innovation
  • economic growth
  • garment industry
  • psychological impact
  • creativity
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