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Some people call for one unified language across the world. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend

Many community members suggest that
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 humanity from all nations should speak one unified language.
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, there are advantages and disadvantages at the same time.
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ideology
 of one language is a really hard idea to make
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come true. All the cultures from different parts of the world will be forced to stick with one method of speaking, reading, writing and listening.
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 will cause
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loosing
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 the culture and will leave the past behind.
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 is un beneficial because the past of the country will prevent them
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 the same mistake in the future. In
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, teaching the
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 regions with hard
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access
 to education will be
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 hard.
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 will develop an
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inequality
 among the citizens. Some will be able to speak, listen and understand.
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 the others will not be able to catch up as
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 and fast.
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, the advantages are undeniably large.
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, the international politics will be
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 in a good way. Countries from different continents
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 as Africa and Asia will be able to
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communicate
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needing
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translators
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 will obviously block the issues with
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communication
. Lies in international conferences will no longer
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appear because
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 will understand
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 example, wars will stop
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 easy unified meetings. In conclusion, even though there are advantages and disadvantages of
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 language policy, the benefits are much higher. I
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 that
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 future.

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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a short intro, then two clear ideas, then a full ending that states your view.
cohesion
Keep one idea per sentence and use simple links like first, also, but, so to show how ideas fit.
grammar
Fix big word mistakes and use easy words. Check spell and word choice (for example undeveloped, access, translators).
content
Give a real example of how a single language can help or harm work or life.
content
Add more detail to each point so you show more thought.
content
The essay tries to show both sides of the issue.
structure
It ends with a clear view.
cohesion
It uses some link words to join ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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