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The table below shows the production of potatoes, cabbage and onions in five countries in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

This
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 chart illustrates the
rate
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 of some vegetables
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such
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, such
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 as
potatoes
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, cabbage, and onions
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, of
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of
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in
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 five nations in 2012. Looking at the table
propary
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properly
,
Europe
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 was the highest point of
first
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the first
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 table. Only
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Europe
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Europe's
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potatoes
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potato
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rate
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 of taking
overed
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over
 90kg. North America followed
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secondly
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secondly,
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 without
Europe
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,
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;
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 North America was only higher than 50gk each person.
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However
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However,
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 other
countries
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countries'
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persentage
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percentage
 of
take
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apply
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potatoes
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per
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taken per
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 person
were
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was
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 under
the
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apply
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30kg. Especially, Africa showed
lowest
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the lowest
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 point, only
this
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 country did not eat more than 20kg
at
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apply
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per person.
Second
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The second
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 table graph shows
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rate
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the rate
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 of production,
Europe
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ans
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and
 Asia were the most significant
contries
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countries
 to make
potatoes
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. These two
nations's
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nations'
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rate
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rates
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 were around 5times
of
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that of
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 other countries. There was a huge gap between
Europe
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, Asis and others. Asis did not
consumped
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consume
 a lot as
mush
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much
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 as they produced. Africa had a
littel
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little
 difference
consumption
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in consumption
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 and production.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, potatoes, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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