Many people believe that some zoos have no purpose in todays world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?

Mostly

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folks think that nowadays there is no need

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for

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zoos

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and

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should be banned and

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those

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things which help

people

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mental and physical growth.

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are becoming more common at

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time.

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the problem and the solution of

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phenomenon. On the one hand, a lot of folks

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to see

animals

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and have a great interest in

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wish

they

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tend to zoo to see different species of

animals

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zoos

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owners brought

animals

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from the different corners of the world to entertain their visitors and earn a handsome income from them.

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trend

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a numerous role to extinct the rare species that are available in our

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habitat

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a law to protect

rare

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animal generation from danger. For

intance

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instance

, white lions are at the stage of extinction, and

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animal from

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it in a market for

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this kind

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animals

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should be stopped and protect

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this

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animals

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Zoos

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have plays

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a numerous

role

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to attract visitors and

also

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help to boost

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the country

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country

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economic growth. There are a lot of methods to attract travellers.

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with science museums, which help

individuals

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individuals'

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mental growth

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increase their power of

knowledg

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knowledge

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, build tourist places in your country

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invest

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accient

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ancient

places which attract visitors

huge

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and impress them.

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zoos

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are

danger

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for

animals

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if we alternate them with some visiting

places

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they

gives

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us a lot of benefits.

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, everything that has been stated so far,

zoos

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should be

ban

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banned

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and refuse hunters to stop their hunting for some money. There should be

make

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apply

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some laws for the protection of

animals

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and

make

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keep

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safe them

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them safe

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in their own

habitates

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habitats

paradisian1133

Feb 12, 2026

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Fix basic spelling and grammar so your ideas are clear.

structure

Make a clear plan: start with an introduction that says what you think, have body parts with the reason, and finish with a short conclusion.

coherence

Use simple linking words like 'but', 'and', 'also', 'for example' to connect ideas.

content

The topic is clear and you show a view on the issue.

content

You give some real examples such as white lions and hunter trade.

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for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

313 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Confinement
Psychological stress
Ethical concerns
Obesity
Abnormal behavior
Captivity
Conservation
Breeding programs
Endangered species
Natural habitats
Public education
Ecosystems
Financial costs
Wildlife sanctuaries
Ethical tourism
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