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Band 4.5

Nowadays more tasks at home and work are being performed by robots.

In a modern world, many cars
were
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 driven by artificial
intelligence
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.
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 the result of advanced sensor and computer technology, so a human driver is no longer necessary. The downside of
this
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 development is that many professional drivers might lose their jobs in the future. Meanwhile, you can find complex, sophisticated technology in many devices that we use. These advanced technologies were meant to support our daily lives. The development of sensors, CPUs, and software was a big step towards fully automated but still simple and repetitive processes. By introducing artificial
intelligence
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, it is possible to solve complex tasks.
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, Tesla cars were able to operate fully autonomously in traffic. So there is no longer a need for a human driver to drive a car. The downside of
this
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 trend is that by implementing advanced artificial
intelligence
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 into our lives, many jobs can become obsolete. On the example of a self-driving car, there will be no need for professional drivers in the future. The transport sector might be heavily affected if AI takes over.    
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, artificial
intelligence
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 can make daily life much easier.
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, all comes at a cost, and some humans might lose their jobs.

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task achievement
Your task has a clear topic and you show a view. To get higher marks, make a small plan with three main ideas and give a clear end line to the essay.
coherence cohesion
Use more glue to link ideas. Use words like and, but, also, however, therefore to show how ideas fit.
content
The essay keeps a simple view on AI in cars and jobs.
structure
It ends with a short, clear last line.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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