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Band 4.5

In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and tv shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

In certain countries, the crime
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category
 has been increasing in popularity recently through novels and TV shows.
This
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 preference is
due to
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 the exciting and unpredictable nature
in
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 these types of films or books
that is
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 able to captivate
the
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people
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. In my view,
while
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 it is an experience in enjoying those pieces, it can
also
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 have a positive impact
to
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the
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people
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's
creativenes
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creativity
 and
problem solving
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 skills. In
typical
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a typical
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 crime
scence
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scene
 or story, it is filled with surprising and mysterious elements, creating an atmosphere of
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 that can be pleasing to a majority of
audience
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the audience
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. With the advanced technology that studios have today, they are able to create and edit complex
scences
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scenes
 or animations that can enhance the experience to a higher standard.
Additionally
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, writers can take part in
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discussions
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 with others from around the globe with the use of
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, letting them expand and accumulate ideas collected from the broader perspectives of other individuals.
For instance
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, every major
shows
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 that
are
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is
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 or selected for an award
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 usually built up from
mutiple
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multiple
 writers and designers.
Nonetheless
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, it can
also
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 bring certain problems or
situation
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situations
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 more attention, which can create an
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 that fans can partake in to think and come up with solutions. Noticeably, when left with plot holes or something
that is
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 not logical,
people
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 tend to make predictions or assumptions because of their
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curiosity
.
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, not only does it help with development in logical thinking
but
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also
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it also
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allow
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allows
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people
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 to
recognize
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 situations and acknowledge certain obstacles that can be a valuable tool in our society today.
For example
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, there are
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multiple
 communities devoted themselves solving and making
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hypotheses
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 of a show or a novel
mysteries
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. Not only
they are
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are they
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 able to collect vast details hidden within, but
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 the thought process of connecting pieces together to make
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concreate
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 proof that many would believe . In conclusion, the trend of movies and novels
revoving
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revolving
 around crime is increasing
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 with its
suspendful
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suspenseful
 and captivating
story telling
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. And that it
cna
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can
 contribute positively towards a person's mindset and their behaviours in
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 and
problem solving
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problem-solving
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 skills.

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content and structure
The idea of the essay is clear and you give your view. But the plan is not strong. The points are not put in a simple, clear way.
language
Spell and word form have many slips which hide the true meaning. Fix easy spelling and use simple, exact words.
structure
Make one idea in each paragraph. Start with a clear line that states the main idea. Then add a short example or reason.
language
Use simple sentences. Short, direct lines are easy to read and work well in IELTS.
content
Add more exact examples that fit the idea. Try to use real life or clear ideas.
strength
The writer has a clear view and says it.
strength
Some good link words are used to show cause and result.
strength
The essay has a start and a finish. There is an intro and a conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • phenomenon
  • intrigue
  • enigma
  • compelling
  • addictive
  • chilling
  • forensics
  • procedural
  • thriller
  • suspense
  • psychological
  • criminalistics
  • deviant
  • intricate
  • red herrings
  • misdirection
  • sardonically
  • socioeconomic
  • catharsis
  • moral ambiguity
  • multidimensional
  • protagonist
  • antagonist
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