The graphs below show the viewership of different TV programs among these different age groups

The bar chart provides a comparative analysis of the

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of

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in various occupations —accountant, cook,

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engineer, and

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programmer — who migrated to Australia in 2009, 2010, 2011, and 2012.

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of accountants dominated over the entire period,

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followed by cooks and

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engineers.

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the reverse was true for

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programmers. In detail, the highest

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was observed in accountants over the given four-year period. The

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accounted for nearly 20.000

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in 2009,

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underwent

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increase to about 27.000 employees by 2010

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the highest share on the chart. In 2011, the

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of accountants experienced a sharp decline to approximately 22.000

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,

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dropped slightly by 2012.

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the smallest

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was observed in

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programmers, the

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made up around 3.000 employees in 2009,

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grew slightly in 2010,

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recovered its previous record.

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of

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programmers reached its peak at roughly 5% in 2012. In terms of the cooks and

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engineers, the figures were recorded about 17.000 and 19.000

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in 2009. The

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of cooks underwent a slight decline to nearly 15.000

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in 2010,

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recovered roughly its previous

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in 2011. By 2012, the

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dropped slightly to about 16.000. The

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of

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engineers experienced a continual growth and reached approximately 20.000 in 2010 and around 22.000 in 2011. Afterwards, the

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underwent a steady decrease to approximately 17.000

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