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Due to many human activities animal's and plants' life is in danger. Some think that this cannot be changed. Some think that government should do something. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Protecting the
life
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 of
specious
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species
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recently
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has recently
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 become the most
conroversial isssue
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controversial issue
,
due to
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the people
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human
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 activities
most
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, most
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of
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apply
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animals
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 and
plants
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become
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are
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 in danger.
However
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, many people believe that
government
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the government
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 should protect
the
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apply
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animal's
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animals
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 and
plants
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'
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lives
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life
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life,
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while
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 others think it's too late and
this
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 cannot be changed.
This
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essay will
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essay will discuss both perspectives before presenting my own view. On the one hand, some citizens
supposed
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suppose
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 that changing the
totall
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total
 damage can be impossible
due to
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 the fact that gas
fules
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fuels
 and cutting the trees
which
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, which
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 reduce the
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animals
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animals'
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habitat
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habitat,
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 can
be
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incur
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 higher
finincial
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financial
cost
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costs
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 to the government .
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, there is no doubt that the
life
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 of
animals
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 and
plants
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essential
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is essential
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 for the
envirnoment's
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environment's
 balance
but
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, but
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 we cannot
avoide
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avoid
 using cars or factories to avoid
pullotion
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pollution
.
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,
resolved
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this
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 issue by the authorities will be expensive.
On the other hand
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, the opponents believe that
this
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 is the main role for
government
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the government
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 to
safegarud
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safeguard
 the environment.
Moreover
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,
adminstrators
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administrators
 should reduce the damage
which happend
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that is caused
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 by factories or cutting trees. For
examples
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example
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, building factories in a
plece
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place
 far away from the population and
animals
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' habitat
diffenitlly
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definitely
 assists
to reduce
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in reducing
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 the highly negative impact.
Beside of
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this
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, using recycling products and
enviromentally-friendly
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environmentally-friendly
can
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products can
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seve
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serve
 the
eco-system
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ecosystem
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. In
conclustion
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conclusion
, saving
plants
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 and
animals
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 has a crucial role
to
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in
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 our
lives
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life
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 systems. I believe that the countries should
doing
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be doing
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 their best to preserve the
specious'
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species'
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life
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.

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task response
Explain your view more clearly. Use 2-3 strong reasons for your view. Add at least one real example to support each point. Make your intro restate the question and show your stance.
coherence cohesion
Put each idea in its own paragraph. Start a new paragraph with a clear topic sentence. Use linking words to show how ideas go together. Check that pronouns refer to a noun earlier in the text.
language
Work on spelling and grammar so readers can focus on your ideas. Simple sentence structure helps you tell your point better. A quick check of common spellings and phrases can help a lot.
content
The writer tries to cover both sides of the issue.
structure
The ending gives a view and a conclusion.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animals
  • plants
  • life
  • danger
  • harm
  • protect
  • save
  • home
  • land
  • water
  • air
  • waste
  • plastic
  • trees
  • forest
  • fish
  • bird
  • hunt
  • hunted
  • people
  • government
  • laws
  • rules
  • plan
  • money
  • fund
  • education
  • teach
  • future
  • time
  • change
  • together
  • action
  • step
  • area
  • park
  • save
  • farm
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