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Band 4

It is important for all towns and cities to have large outdoor parks and squares. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

It is often of
people
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,
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 that all
tows
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towns
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 or cities must have
a
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apply
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large outdoor parks.
However
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, some individuals
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that
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is
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it is
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 not important at all.
Therefore
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 writer will talk about what
advantage
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advantages
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 and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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from
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of
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this
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 topic. Almost
persons
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all people
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 in recent years
says
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say
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, which government in
the
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cities must make
a
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huge
outdoors
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outdoor
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 parks or a square in every
cities
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city
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. I agree with
this
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 statement,
due to
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 it can be a refreshment for
people
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 who
exhausted
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are exhausted
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 with their work or school. If there is a park in the city, citizens can use that after doing their activities.
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 researchers, they
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,
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 that
people
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 who
lives
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live
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 near
from
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a green
space
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 area
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are oftenly
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oftenly healtier
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often healthier
than
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apply
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and
less
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have less
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 stress than
persons
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people
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 who live far from the green
space
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. Since
,
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 they can use the green
space
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oftenly
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often
,
people
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 can use that for exercise and refreshing.
In contrast
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,
this
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 policy can make
people
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more
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apply
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healthier or less
stress
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stressed
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. Because
,
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 not all area is
cover
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covered
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 by the outdoor parks or
square
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squares
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.
Also
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, not everyone likes
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this
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these
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 things for doing
an
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activities.
That is
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 why, it can be 100%
usefull
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useful
. And it can make
people
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 who
can
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cannot
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 have that jealous
with
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of
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that
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those
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 things.
that
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whill
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will
 make
a
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bigger problems. So, in
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the writer
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writer
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writer's
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prespective
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perspective
it
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, it
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 can be more
usefull
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useful
 if the towns make more
greens
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green spaces
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space
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but
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, but
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 not
tu
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too
 large but evenly
in
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distributed in
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 all areas. In
conclude
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conclusion
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,
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This
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this
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 statement is a good
ideas
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idea
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 for the authorities to
makes
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make
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a
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apply
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outdoor areas.
Nevertheless
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, it
more
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is more
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usefull
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useful
 or good for
citizen
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citizens
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 if it can even cover all areas with more than one outdoor park.

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structure
Plan and state your view in a short intro. Then give two clear ideas with a small example for each. End with a short conclusion.
coherence
Make your writing flow. Use linking words like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'for example'.
grammar
Use simple grammar. Check spell and form of words. Learn common mistakes in verb form and plural.
content
You show a clear view that parks in towns can help people.
content
You give a health and stress reason for parks.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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