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Band 2.5

Some people think having a university degree is the best way to secure a good job. However, others believe skills and experience are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Having a better career has been
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 huge challenge in our lives.
Public
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The public
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 claims that the diploma of university
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diploma is
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 the greatest method to have
higher
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a higher
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 position, but others think proficiency and experience are more significant. In my opinion, an
acedemic
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academic
 degree is important to apply for a job.
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 essay will explain why having a great grade will be beneficial,
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and discuss
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 the opposite side as well. People who prefer
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apply
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professionalism think that a
skillful
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skilful
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 person would show better performance than beginners in the working field. There are some cases of the chief executive officers of successful companies who left the university before graduating and started running a new business.
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, college marks are more
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crucial
 to workers. Education is being taken as the definition of
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an individual’s
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 proficiency nowadays.
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 a study by
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the Education
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 Institute of Miami, about 80
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 of employers
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tend to require
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a bachelor
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bachelor
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bachelor's
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 degree for many want to get
ajob
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a job
.
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 people who
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 not have are likely to have
lower
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a lower
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 position. For that reason, the diploma is
the
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a
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 better way to secure a good job, because it obviously defines what you can do. In summary,
Degree
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a Degree
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 is more required
whenyougetasuperior
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when you get a superior
 career than just
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apply
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experience; the advantages of it are clear.
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however
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, the skill should be an extra merit.

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organization
Plan your writing before you start. Make a short plan for ideas in each paragraph.
content
Give more on both sides and keep a clear view. Use the same space for each side.
content
Back ideas with simple facts or examples and show how they help your view.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Use simple, correct sentences and common words.
structure
The essay shows a clear view at the end.
cohesion
There is some link word like Nevertheless to join ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • competitive advantage
  • in-depth knowledge
  • theoretical understanding
  • networking opportunities
  • prerequisite
  • professions
  • practical, hands-on knowledge
  • perform tasks efficiently and effectively
  • actual ability
  • deliver results
  • problem-solving
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • real-world settings
  • blend of both education and practical experience
  • theoretical concepts
  • ideal scenario
  • bolstered by practical application
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