Some people think that teenage years are the happiest times of most people's live. Others think that adult life brings more happiness in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Several individuals believe that people who are teenagers are living
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happy moments of their lives,
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others think that
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are the ones who are living their happy
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even though it comes with many responsibilities. In
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essay, I will explain both sides and include my opinion. On the one hand, I think that teenagers experience more fun in comparison to
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individuals,
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various reasons.
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, they have fewer duties compared to
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, they do not have to worry about financial problems or the pressure of switching
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career.
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, free time; they can discover new hobbies and interests since they have more time compared to
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who are often occupied with their job or family.
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, teenagers are more prone to have more social connections, since they are always together in school, which
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the key to the happiest times of their lives.
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,
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adults
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may suffer from the multiple tasks they are required to do, they
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have fun and have experienced happy times in their lives. Financial capabilities are the reason why
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have more freedom
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to young people. Because of
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ability,
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are more likely to do several things,
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as shopping and travelling to explore other cultures.
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to that,
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often engage in active sports,
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, hiking and cycling, to keep
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in shape; through these activities, they meet up with new people and form new friendships.
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, whilst
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have more financial capability that allows them new experiences, I firmly think that teenage years are the happiest years of someone's life since they have freedom, which means no responsibilities.

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task response
Make your reasons clear. Each idea should have a short example.
coherence
Link ideas in order with simple words like first, next, also.
grammar
Keep many sentences short. Use easy words. Avoid long sentences.
content
You show both sides and give your view.
structure
You use contrast words like On the one hand and On the other hand.
conclusion
You end with your own view and a clear conclusion.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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