The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart gives the proportion of Australian
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grouped by birth countries,
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the table gives information on where they live. There are 6 nations in total
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Australia, the United Kingdom, New Zealand, China, the Netherlands and other countries. These
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are
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grouped by residential location. Australians contribute the highest proportion of
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at 73%, and of
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proprtion 83% reside in
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the remaining 17% are in rural
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. The closest are the Netherlanders , at only 14% of whom 80% inhabit the
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and 20% in rural
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the Britons
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make up 7%, 89% of them inhabit the city ,
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11% are seen in the countryside. The remaining 6 per cent is shared between New Zealanders , at 3% of whom 80% reside in the
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, the Chinese , at 2% of whom 99% have their homes in the
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, and the
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1% is by the other nationalities, of whom their residential data is unavailable.
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, the highest proportion of
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is the Australians, and the least constitutes the other nationalities group. It is
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seen that, regardless of nationality, people prefer to reside in urban
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rather than rural
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words residents, cities, areas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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