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You recently attended a series of English lessons in a language school. However, you were unhappy with the teaching quality. Write a letter to the director of the school. In your letter: • explain why you chose to study English at the school • describe the problems you had with the lessons • suggest how the classes could be improved

Dear Sir, The purpose of writing
this
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to
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 inform you about my dissatisfaction
about
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with
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 the
two weeks
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english
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English
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spoken
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course
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 that I took from your school
last
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 month. Please allow me to elaborate. I was
been
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pleased by the reputation you have in the local newspaper about the
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course
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 that you
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deliver
 to the
student
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students
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.
Moreover
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, my colleague said that your school provides a comprehensive
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english
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 to
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alumni
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at in
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in
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 affordable price.
Due to
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this
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 temptation, I
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for
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on
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 that
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which
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, which
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of
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for
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 two weeks and
paid
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cost
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 $100.
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,
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the
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course
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 did not meet my
expectation
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expectations
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because
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for
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the
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two reasons.
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, the projector was not working properly
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this
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 teacher was explaining through the books
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 of
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demonstrating
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,
although
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 we were frustrated and bored in the lecture,
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the tutor
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 was lacking
actually
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knowlege
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knowledge
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 and made frequent mistakes
while
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 teaching. I would like to request you to
setup
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set up
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 the equipment in advance so that students can study with audio-visual means and can use the time effectively.
Furthermore
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, hiring
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 expert teacher with years of experience can add value to the
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instead
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 of wasting time and money on
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course
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 which does not have any insights. I wish you
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 consider my viewpoints, and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Rand

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task
State your purpose at the start in one line.
coherence
Put each main idea in its own paragraph.
grammar
Check the verb form and tense, and fix common mistakes.
tone
Keep a formal tone and use simple words.
content
Finish with what you want, such as a reply or action from the director.
content
Clear aim and you cover all required points.
tone
Polite closing and formal tone.
structure
The letter is easy to read and breaks into parts.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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