172. Some people think government should ban dangerous sports, such as skydiving and rock climbing. Do you agree or disagree?

It is widely believed that many people
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that the
government
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should ban dangerous
sports
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. I will partially agree to
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notion.
This
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essay will
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discuss
both viewpoints before forming a conclusion.
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with, many people think that the
government
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should ban
high risk
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sports
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namely
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, namely
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, skydiving, rock climbing, scuba diving, and more.
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, these games put an individual
into
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at
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high risk. Many people reported
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apply
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they
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apply
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having serious injuries like bone
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,
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muscles, and so on.
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, many youngsters
attracted
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are attracted
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towards
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sports
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. They feel
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that
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if they participate in those games, their reputation will
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rise
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and easy way to get famous.
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, in the TNC newspaper mentioned, a high number of student like to
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in
adventrous
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adventurous
sports
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in
order
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to gain
sucess
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success
in their social profile. On the flip side, the
government
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should give proper training, education in
order
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to participate in those kinds of
sports
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.
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must be
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by a trainer in
order
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to perform
sport
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sports
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.
This
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will help to reduce
sports
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injuries.
Along with
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this
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, it helps to gain confidence by
performing
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participating in
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sports
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. It helps to make
individual
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individuals
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strong and independent.
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,in the CMC channel shows, some children overcome their fear by just joining
sports
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at a
recoginsed
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recognised
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.
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, the
government
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should set
particular
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a particular
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age limit to perform those activities.
To conclude
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this
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topic, I believe the
government
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should open more training
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due to
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so that
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which
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apply
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proper education
be
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can be
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given in
order
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to play nicely. Every individual must be supervised
while
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performing an activity. It is the duty of
hoster
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of
game
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the game
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to validate the
envirnoment
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environment
,
equipments
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equipment
before opening their stadium.

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task response
State a clear view early and keep it. Support it with two or three strong points for each view, with simple, real examples.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear plan and link words. Each part should have one main idea, and connect ideas well.
structure
Intro and conclusion are there, so the task has a frame.
content
There are ideas on risk and training that fit the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • risk
  • danger
  • ban
  • regulate
  • rules
  • safety
  • government
  • people
  • freedom
  • choice
  • health
  • fitness
  • skill
  • training
  • instructor
  • license
  • certified
  • gear
  • helmet
  • rope
  • harness
  • equipment
  • climb
  • skydiving
  • emergency
  • accident
  • harm
  • benefit
  • cost
  • public
  • society
  • age
  • limit
  • supervision
  • policy
  • law
  • control
  • decision
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