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Band 4.5

Although more and more people get the news on social media, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree?

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 as social
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 is known for
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 rapid information
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 can guarantee
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their
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credibility
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 because
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 the information social
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 provides is up to date
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 rapidness, I firmly believe that the important
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 because
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credibility
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newspaper
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 has and the
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 of journalism
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newspapers
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 provided
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writings
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from
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had
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 been trained for years
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 is based
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. Before
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newspaper
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a newspaper
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 is printed, journalists
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 to do research and
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 for their writing before they share their writing
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 their supervisor for approval and get it printed. The process for them to have their
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 printed is taking time with several
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. The flow of
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 produced in
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 is different
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 on social
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 indeed fast and accessible
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 people can access
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 their
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resulting
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great number of readers
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. It is important to check the
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 of
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 because everyone can write whatever they believe in social
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 without
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. In conclusion, I agree that
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 still hold the most important
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source
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 for many people
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 their
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 and the
quality
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 of journalism they have. It is important to have a credible
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that is
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fact checked
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 for the
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 we read. A good
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 of journalism is what we are looking
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, rather than having a fast but
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untrustworthy
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source
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 online.

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structure
In every part, keep one main idea and give one clear example to back it up.
grammar
Keep grammar simple and check common errors like 'has' vs 'have' and verb forms.
coherence
Use small linking words to show order, such as first, then, also, so.
content
Add a real example of how a newspaper checks facts to support your point.
coherence
Try not to repeat the same idea. Make the text flow from one idea to the next.
task response
You give a clear view and you answer the task.
coherence
The writing has a basic plan with an intro, body, and ending.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Credibility
  • Journalistic standards
  • Dissemination
  • Fake news
  • Demographics
  • Digital news consumption
  • Interactivity
  • Engagement
  • Public opinion
  • Adaptation
  • Regulatory
  • Revenue
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