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Band 2

These days many people interested in buying organic food even though it is often more expensive than conventionally produced food What are some reason people prefer organic food ? Do you think it is important to buy organic food despite the higher price?

Organic
food
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 is considered expensive
yet
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, yet
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 the demand and interest of
people
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 in buying it is still high.
This
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 trend is not merely because it is better than conventionally produced
food
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, but
also
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the
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because the
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 reasons behind it are more than just that. First and foremost is organic means healthier. Compared to naturally-grown, the
food
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that is
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 produced in
organic
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an organic
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 way is considered rich in nutrients
which
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, which
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will benefit
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is
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 more
to
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beneficial to
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 health. Second is the awareness
on
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of
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 living a healthier life.
People
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 nowadays tend to prioritise what they put
to
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in
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 their bodies
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, which
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 in
long
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the long
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 term will
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have
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impact
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an impact
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 on their lives. The third reason that might
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lead to the trend of organic
food
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 is the economic growth globally.
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quite
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is quite
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 reasonable
why
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, why
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people
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 can afford it
eventhough
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even though
 it is expensive in terms of
productions
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production
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 and
process
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processing
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 before they are put on the market.
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, organic
food
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 is still one of many options available for
people
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 to buy. That does not automatically
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substitute
conventional
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the conventional
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 one. The prices can be
the
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a
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cons
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con
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 for those who prefer to stay in the
comodities
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commodities
 that are conventional.

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task
Add your view on price. Decide if you think organic food is worth the extra money and say why.
structure
content
Give facts or real examples to back each reason.
language
Fix misspelt words and bad word form. Check 'eventhough', 'comodities', 'subtituted' and others.
structure
There is a clear order with First, Second, and Third.
content
The idea of health helps fit the topic well.
topic focus
The essay sticks to the topic of organic food.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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