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Band 4

Some people think that killing animals for food is cruel, but others claim that animals are a necessary part of diet. What is your opinion?

rom
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From
 the past until now,
community
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 must live from eating. It means whatever you can digest to make your body grow. Other
community
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 believe
population
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the population
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 can only choose to be vegetarian because it won't kill any
animals
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. I am convinced
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 will examine it. the
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, In the earth has many things stay
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 as
humans
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,
animals
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, plants, bacteria, insects, etc., but everything has to survide so it depends the way you choose that made you are so cruel especially,
Humans
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 who have big brain and they are the one claver in
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 planet they learn themsleves to find the things to eat for alive with many ideas
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 how cruel they are.
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,
animals
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also
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 have to kill
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one a little more than themselves to eat.
This
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 is the cycle for life.
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, some people believe
humans
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 can stay without eating
animals
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 , and people can be vegetarian for their whole life for One reason is that many
animals
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 die a lot for prepare to be food, but
humans
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 can't eat at all and throw them every single day , like you never appreciate what you have. Conclusion,
i
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 believe
community
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the community
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 can eat
animals
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 for alive
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this
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 is the main reason, but
population
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the population
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 have to limit of
population
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number
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 of
animals
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 to be killed and eat more vegetarian for to balance
intake
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the intake
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 for every life. and find any machines for killing
animals
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 not too cruel ,
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medicines to make sure they are gone without a scary time.

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structure
Plan your answer in one clear view first. State your main idea and keep to it.
structure
Use paragraphs: one for intro, two or three for ideas, one for conclusion.
coherence
Link ideas with small words like also, but, so, then.
language
Check spell and word use. Some words are wrong or misspelt.
content
Give one or two small examples to show your point.
content
Try to stay on topic and do not add long off topic lines.
content
You try to share both sides and give your view.
language
You write in simple form and try to use short sentences.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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