The table show information about age, average income per person and population below poverty line in three stages in the USA

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, income, and rate among two age groups, in 3 different
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of the United
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of America.
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, California is the richest state,
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Utah constitutes a smaller percentage. In Utah, people over 60 years old were fewer than in other groups. In California. There were more 18 years old under individuals than older one, representing 17% and 13%, respectively.
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the profit of an average individual made up 23000 us dollars.
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the
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line constituted 16%.
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, Utah showed 28% of the young group
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and 8% of the elderly.
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, the average income was 17000, but
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line was roughly 9%
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Florida had more residents compared to other
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. 16% of under-18s, and 23% of the elderly.
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, Florida’s habitats earned more, approximately 22000 dollars per person annually. Regardless of their income, the
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line was relatively high compared to other
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, constituting 12%

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