The line graph compares the daily travel of British commuters using three different vehicles from 1970 to 2030.

The graph illustrates the
amount
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number
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of individuals commuting daily via
three
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different
transportations
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transportation
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in the UK between 1970 and 2030. Units are displayed in millions.
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, the use of private
vehicle
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vehicles
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has skyrocketed
in
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the period of 50 years.
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, British
citizen
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citizens
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who travel by
Train
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increased significantly,
while
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Bus had a moderate decline. Both
Car
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the Car
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and
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Train
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the Train
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achieved their peak at 2030.
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, Bus went from the second largest passenger to the bottom rank. In 1970,
Car
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the Car
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had a little less than six
million
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passengers on
daily
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a daily
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basis before it rose to around seven
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in 2000. Meanwhile,
Bus
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the Bus
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decreased to just over
three
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million
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. It
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finally
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reached its lowest point with just below
three
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million
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people commuting daily.
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,
Train
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soared from a minority with half below
three
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million
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to almost six
million
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passengers. A notable trend
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in the period of 10 years. From 2000 to 2010, both Car and
Train
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remained constant
with
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approximately seven
million
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and
three
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million
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people, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, train, million with synonyms.
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