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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the levels by which
energy
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 from tonnes of oil was produced in the UK from three main fuel types: petroleum, natural gas, and coal
over
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, over
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period
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a period
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 of 19 years. Measured by
energy
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units
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that petroleum is the highest dominant
production
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all
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apply
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over
decade
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the decade
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.
Whereas
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, coal
production
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 started high but
fall
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fell
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 by the end,
conversely
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, natural gas showed
shift
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a shift
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 from
this
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 pattern. Petroleum
production
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 of
energy
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 commenced
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production
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apply
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in 1981, at just 85
energy
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units
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,
then
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 peaked in 1984 with 140
units
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,
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. This
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this
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 pattern remains relatively steady for the next two years. After that ,in 1990
this
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 figure represented a
down ward
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downward
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 trend to
approximatly
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approximately
 100, followed by another period of increasing. In terms of coal
production
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,
this
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 type accounted for its peak at the
begining
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beginning
 of the time frame by around 80
units
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,
then
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drop
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dropped
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 to just 48, before
raise
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rising
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 again and
experiened flucuation
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experienced fluctuation
 till 2000. In
contast
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contrast
, the figure
of
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for
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 natural gas
was
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apply
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represented a shifted pattern
fromthe privious
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from the previous
 type,
by
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apply
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which
start
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started
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 at nearly 40
units
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then
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and then
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 showed
significant
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a significant
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 increase till the end of
period
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the period
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.
This
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types
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type
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 is the second most
source
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significant source
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 of
energy
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production
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 in the UK from 1991 to 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, units, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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