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Band 4.5

In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. do the advantages outweigh the distadvantages?

Nowadays,
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numbers
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 of people who prefer to read
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books
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higher
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 than people who
reads
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paper
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books
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. Because in our
centry
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century
 everybody
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 a hurry somewhere, and
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 not have
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 to enjoy moments. And reading is
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example
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for
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this
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. Every
formats
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 of
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have
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their
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advantages
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 and
disadvantages
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. I
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 that
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advantages
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the advantages
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 of
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books
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 outweigh the
disadvantages
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. Let us first look at the
advantages
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 of reading
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books
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. They are very comfortable to carry with you everywhere. Because you can download them on your
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 or laptop, and read
it
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them
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 when you have free
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. For
exampe
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example
, you go to work by subway, and you have
a
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an
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 hour before
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your
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 arrival. You can spend
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time
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 reading a book on your
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 .
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, if you prefer to read
on
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online
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an online
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format
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 you can spend much less money . Because some
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books
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 can be free or cost less than
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books
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.
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, you can buy several
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books
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instead
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 of one
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 book.
On the other hand
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, reading on the screen can have
bad
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a bad
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 effect on
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people's
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phisical
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physical
 and mental health. Because when we read
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books
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 ,we spend a lot of
time
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 at the computer or
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.
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, it can affect
on
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you
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your
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 eyes and lead to visual impairment.
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, spending
lot
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a lot
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 of
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at
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on
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 the
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 or other devices can kill their battery. Because the gadget is wearing out and
hold
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 the charge badly. As an
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 ,
i
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I
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 put the battery of my
phone
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 to read
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books
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. In my opinion,
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books
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advantages
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 outweigh their
disadvantages
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. I always prefer
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books
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instead
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 of their
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. In conclusion,
e-
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books
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 are good for travel and study,
paper
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books
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 for deep reading and gifts.
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 mix of both can be best , depending on the reader.

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Task response
In your essay, show a clear and strong stance at the start and finish with a short, clear conclusion.
Coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words and phrases. Use words like 'also', 'but', 'however', 'in addition' to connect ideas.
Structure
Make each paragraph focus on one idea. Start with the main idea, then give a short detail or example.
Grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Fix common errors like 'centry'->'century', 'phisical'->'physical'.
Vocabulary
Use simple and exact words. Some phrases are unclear; try to say exactly what you mean.
stance
Clear position that e-books have more good points.
examples
Some real life examples are used to show points.
structure
There is a conclusion that sums up the view.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • book
  • paper
  • read
  • e-book
  • device
  • screen
  • font
  • size
  • light
  • night mode
  • search
  • notes
  • highlights
  • bookmark
  • download
  • cost
  • money
  • save
  • space
  • carry
  • travel
  • instant
  • access
  • library
  • borrow
  • price
  • save paper
  • environment
  • trees
  • paper
  • waste
  • eye
  • strain
  • battery
  • life
  • glare
  • distraction
  • apps
  • internet
  • privacy
  • rights
  • mix
  • balance
  • read deeply
  • focus
  • deep reading
  • long
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