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Handwriting today is less formal than it was in the past. What are the causes of this change? Is it a positive or negative development?

As it appears, the usage of paper letters written by hand has experienced a significant decline
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, compared to past times , when it made its debut as an innovative tool of information transfer among humans
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 to
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successful
 civil development. Apparently, the following tendency has spread its benefits
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 flaws onto us
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 shall be discussed .    First things
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we need to acknowledge the progress of the whole humanity that attributes to
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distant communication. The time we invented
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, telegraph devices, and of course,
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the Internet
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 connection
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, people
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 seized an opportunity to exchange information, 
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particularly
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therefore
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 established steady technological growth and formidable comfort for
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 so long awaited.  Letters seem to no longer be a necessity
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 handwriting possesses a limited range. Stuff only remains in a form of precisely dedicated formal applications
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 it finds struggle at schools , where students still need complicated concepts to be implemented on paper by hand,
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 in memorising tons of material.  All appears like a definite advantage if to
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tops
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.   
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, if to think out of the box, we may find out
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 that we end up forgetting writing
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as a skill itself. Sounds like a huge problem, when it comes to our past recognition, seems disonorable towards our ancestors,
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 handwriting is encrypted in our
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 DNA for thousands of years,
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 be a dramatic thing to abandon it all.  In conclusion, it is undoubtedly well disclosed
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 that regretting trends would be a foolish idea, primarily because innovations simplified our
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lives
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cheering
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 over it
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wouldn't make sense because we must not forget our past .

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task response
State a clear view on the question. Say if handwriting decline is good or bad, and give a short reason.
structure
Make a simple plan. Use intro, body with a few ideas, and a short conclusion.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words. Use words like and, but, so, also to connect parts.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling. Fix nowdays, paticularly, disonorable, lifes.
content
Add one or two small examples to back ideas.
style
Avoid long, run on sentences. Use short, plain sentences.
content
The essay shows effort to explain causes and the effect of new tech.
structure
There is a plan to use an intro and a conclusion.
content
The topic is clear and the writer tries to talk about both sides.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • typography
  • cursive
  • digital literacy
  • texting vernacular
  • spontaneous
  • personal expression
  • accessibility
  • individualism
  • nostalgia
  • perceived importance
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