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Band 2.5

In many parts of the world,children are given more freedom than in the past.IS this a positive or negative development.

Nowadays, young people have
weaker
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less
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controlling
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 compared with
few
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a few
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 decades ago throughout the world. Sometimes it works positively.
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, sometimes it grows through negative improvement.
This
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both
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of
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point
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 of view. One reason for
positive
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the positive
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 way is that teenagers can enjoy many things
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such
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, such
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 as activities, new technologies, and social network
system
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systems
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. These things
effect
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to
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children to grow with creativity and wide values. As an example,
young
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the young
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ganeration
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generation
 group which has
been
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grown
with
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 new technologies is more friendly to use computers,
smart phones
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smartphones
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, and
varous
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various
 systems. And they have more knowledge about AI
technics
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techniques
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.
On the other hand
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, there
are
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 some negative growth. When young children are enjoying their freedom, they do not consider
responsiblities
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responsibilities
someone
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. Someone
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 drives
car
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a car
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 ot
truck
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a truck
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with
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without
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 out
lisence
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license
.
Morever
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Moreover
, they
make
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 terrible accidents
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 as selling drugs,
thefting
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theft
, and drunken
drivind
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driving
.
However
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, some countries give them small
runishment
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rewards
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due to
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because
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 they are young. Especially in
korea
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Korea
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,
rate
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the rate
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 of crime
of
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among
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 young people has increased a lot because of meaningless disciplines. In conclusion, growing with a lot of
freedon
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freedom
 can
effect
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affect
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 both positive and
negetive
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negative
 ways. I assume when children have
freedon
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freedom
, they need to have
guide line
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guidelines
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 to protect
thierseleves
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themselves
.

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task
Make your view clear from the start and keep it in every part of the essay.
coherence
Put one idea in each paragraph and begin with a simple line that tells what the paragraph will say.
coherence
Use joining words to show how ideas link (and, but, also, so, therefore).
language
Fix small spelling and grammer errors to make the message clear.
content
Give one or two clear examples and say how they show the point you make.
content
The writer tries to cover both sides of the issue.
structure
There is a start and end paragraph.
content
Some examples are used to back up points.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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