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Government should spend money on railways rather than results.

#government #money #railways #results
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Innthis
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In this
 contemporary era some
segment
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segments
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 of society assert that higher
authrity
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authority
 ought to arrange
budget
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railway
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railways
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instead
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 of elections. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 I agree with
this
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 notion. The reasons behind my agreement are
anyalised
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analysed
analyzed
 in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with,
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government
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the government
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 ought to spend money on
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railway
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railways
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 because of poor transportation, To
explian
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explain
it
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apply
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, many of the
countries
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country's
countries'
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railway
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railways
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 are not good
in
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at
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 transportation
as
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for
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 an example train
not
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 come in
right
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the right
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 time, some times it is
delaied
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delayed
 an hours
as well as
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 some routs are under construction
that is
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 why people are disapointed about it. If higher authority is spent their
budget
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 to
slove
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solve
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railway related
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railway-related
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 problems,
so
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apply
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people can save their time and
undirectly
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indirectly
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notions'
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the
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 economy will be upsurged over the period of time.
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,
train
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a train
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 in Japan is hardly
delaied
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delayed
 for 5 seconds.
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,
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budget
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the budget
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 should spend on
transportaion
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transportation
such
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 as
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railway
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the railway
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 by
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government
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the government
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.
Moreover
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,
higher
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the higher
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authority
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authorities
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 have to spend some portion of
national
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the national
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budget
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 because of
develope
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developing
 advanced
aminities
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amenities
 for citizens. To elaborate
it
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, in some
railway
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station
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stations
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government
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not
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does not
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 provide some basic
requirenments
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requirements
such
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 as no waiting area and electricity problems ,but if
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government
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the government
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 focus
to mitigate
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on mitigating
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this
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these
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requirenments
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requirements
requirement
 and
spend
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spending
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 money on required
facitities
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facilities
,
such
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 as free wifi, air conditionar waiting areas and
maintain
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maintaining
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 hygine. So
travel
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the travel
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 ratio will be increased in
nation
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the nation
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 and
also
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 people can motivated to travel with the use of public
transportion
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transport
 rather than using
private
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a private
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vehicle
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vehicles
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, it
is
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also
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 use to save
ecology
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ecologies
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such
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stop
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a stop
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 to prevent global warming and air pollution.
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, it is
requirement
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a requirement
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to
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for
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 higher authority
spend
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to spend
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 money on
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railway
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the railway
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.
To conclude
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, some
pople
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people
 think that
government
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 spend their
budget
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 on
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the railway
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railway
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railways
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 rather than
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the elections'
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elections'
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elections
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result
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results
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 because of
fulfil
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fulfilling
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 the
requirenment
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requirement
requirements
of
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for
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 poor
transfortation
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transportation
transformation
 and
improve
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improving
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 facilities.
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Your opinion

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