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Band 4.5

THE WORKING week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. do you agree or disagree?

Today, predominantly countries
are having
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 the same ratios between working
days
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 and
weekends
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 as 5 to 2. Some argue that the weekend duration should be longer than the productive day. I believe that
this
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 opinion will not be more effective than the times
rules
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 that
already
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have already
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applied
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been applied
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since
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for
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 decades.
To begin
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 with, the
time
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rules
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 already took place since long
time
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 ago. The consideration of the longer proportion for working
days
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 is to keep individuals’ productivity.
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, if a farmer works for only 3
days
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 and 4
days
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 will
spent
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be spent
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 for leisure, the
harvests’
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harvest’s
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level production
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production level
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 will be
reduce
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reduced
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.
Moreover
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, the farmers will get more income if they can harvest in great number of crops.
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 example is
to simply
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showing
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show
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 the decrease
of
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in
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 productivity levels
because
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due to
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 the changing
time
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rules
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.
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, the weekend is still significant for citizens, because it keeps the productivity level
which
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 people need to rest and entertainment to maintain their physical and mental health.
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, longer times for
weekends
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also
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means
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mean
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 more
time
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 for leisure. On the employment regulation,
employee
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employees
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 are given the
rights
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right
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 to have annual leave excluding
from
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apply
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the
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apply
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weekends
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.
Therefore
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, if someone needs
longer
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a longer
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time
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 for
break
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a break
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, they can use their annual leave
as
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to
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 extend their
weekends
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. By
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this
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applying this
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applied
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apply
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, the
time
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rules
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 which already
implied
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been implied
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since
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for
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 decades
does
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do
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 not
have
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need
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 to add more holidays on weekly. In conclusion,
time
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rules
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which
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, which
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basically
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are basically
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 known for years,
are
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apply
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actually keep us actively
do
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doing
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 our daily activities.
Although
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weekends
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 necessitate
for maintain
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maintaining
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population’s
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the population’s
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 health, two
days
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 for
weekend
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the weekend
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is
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are
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 sufficient
enough
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apply
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to keep us from
burn
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burning
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 out of work routines.

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task
State your main idea in the first paragraph and keep a clear stance throughout the essay.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas, so the text flows better from one idea to the next.
language
Check grammar and word form. Use simple, correct sentences.
examples
Choose examples that fit the topic and show how your point works in real life.
content
The writer gives a clear view that the weekend should not be longer.
structure
Paragraphs are used and there is a short end with a conclusion.
content
The idea of balance between work and rest is kept.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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