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Band 4.5

Humans are producing an increasing amount of trash everyday and the world is becoming full of the landfills we use to get rid of our trash. In your opinion, how can recycling save the environment and help the people on Earth?

Proper management of human
waste
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 is essential to
maintaing
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maintaining
 clean cities and towns. Humans have recorded a massive surge in our population in the past decade
and
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 equally noted the same when it comes to garbage production. Landfills are used in almost every country as dumping grounds for trash is unrecyclable. In my opinion
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this
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 is a temporary solution caused by our overconsumption and excessive
use
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 of plastics.
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 essay will discuss why recycling is an essential part of reducing environmental pollution and improving
quality
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the quality
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 of life for humans.
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,
plastic
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waste
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 is one of the most common items found in landfills.
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, we
use
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plastic
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 everywhere - in supermarkets for food packaging, household items , electrical equipment , automobiles, clothing
etc
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. It is well known that it takes decades for
palstic
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plastic
 to decompose and
unil
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until
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, it pollutes our land, soil and water. It is essential that we reduce unnecessary
plastic
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use
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 and substitute it for recyclable
material
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materials
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such
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 as cloth and paper. Combined efforts can make a difference and drastically reduce the amount of
plastic
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waste
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 and the acres of these landfills
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, people must make conscience decisions in their everyday lives to choose recyclable items that are made of wood, cloth, paper or glass.
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 can drastically reduce the amount of unnecessary
plastic
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waste
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 that would have been generated and contribute to a healthier lifestyle.
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, when we
use
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plastic
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materias
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materials
 in food
preparation
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preparation,
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 it is documented that there are chances that humans may consume some particles
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 eating, drinking
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 a shift to reusable materials is not only healthy but
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 benefits the environment. Recycling is a simple step that can cause a big impact on the environment. In my opinion, it is every
individuals
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individual's
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 responsibility to make an effort through recycling to counter landfill expansion and pollution. A polluted environment affects all life forms and not just us
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therefore
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therefore,
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 we must be more thoughtful in our choices.

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strength
Your answer stays on the topic and gives a clear view on recycling.
improvement
Use more linking words to show how ideas connect.
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Develop each point with more detail and examples.
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Check spelling and grammar to avoid mistakes.
improvement
Break long sentences into shorter ones for easier reading.
strength
Clear view that recycling helps the environment and life on earth.
strength
Idea of replacing plastic with reusable materials is a good point.
structure
Essay has an opening and closing part.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycle
  • recycling
  • reduce
  • reuse
  • waste
  • trash
  • landfill
  • pollution
  • pollute
  • energy
  • save
  • emissions
  • greenhouse gases
  • resources
  • paper
  • plastic
  • metal
  • glass
  • curbside
  • bin
  • sorting
  • recyclable
  • non-recyclable
  • compost
  • environment
  • health
  • jobs
  • money
  • city
  • community
  • policy
  • law
  • plan
  • awareness
  • practice
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