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Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any other experiences we may have in our life.* *Which do you consider to be the major influence?

Researchers argue that nature plays a pivotal role in shaping human
personality
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development
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 as opposed to nurture. It is my opinion that nature contributes more to determining human
personality
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 and
development
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 essay discusses both views and my standpoint . Every human has an inborn trait
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 inherited from the genetic mutation of both parents. These traits are present from creation; they can neither be erased, hidden
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 learned, and help to shape the individual irrespective of the environment or society they have found themselves in.
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 is seen in a popular proverb which says that "a fruit cannot fall far from the tree
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and
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 explains why intelligent and exceptional parents birth intelligent children.
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, nurture, which refers to environmental factors that are learned, seen and interacted with in the course of human growth, has little or no role in determining the
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 and
development
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 of an individual.
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 is so because
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learned
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 or characteristics can be easily forgotten. On
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 premise, there have been several cases of parents who have enrolled their children in different learning
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 to improve their academic performance
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 got no tangible
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. In conclusion, nature is the footprint to which an individual is made and shaped,
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 their
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 and
development
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task
Give more proof for your view. Use clear examples from life or studies.
coherence
Add a plan and topic sentences for each paragraph to show a steady flow.
task
Balance the two views with the same depth, then state your own view clearly.
language
Check spelling and grammar to avoid odd phrases.
stance
A clear main view is stated.
structure
There is a beginning, middle and end.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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