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The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tons, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.

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The graph illustrates acid rain emissions, measured in millions of
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, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.
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, all four sectors faced decline, except transport and communication , which fluctuated throughout
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 period.
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, the electricity, gas and water supply section drastically decreased
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 by
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.
Initially
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, electricity, gas and water supply figures showed the highest
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 , which
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 3.4 in 1991. Despite owning the highest initial number, it started to dip in the first 8 years , and by the end of
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1999, it represented just 1
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tonnes
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. After that, it slowly increased by 0.1
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 , but, eventually, in the final
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 , which is 2007, it generated almost 0.5
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. Other industries began with more than 2
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 , and in the following 14 years,
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 gradually descended, eventually ending with 1.4
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. In
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1991 transport and communication sector emitted 0.8
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. In the next years, it fluctuated around 1
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. In the final
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, it finished with 0.7
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.
Domestic
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The domestic
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 figure at the beginning of
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1991 depicted 0.6
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. In the period of time from 1995 to 1998, it remained the same. From 1999, it declined slowly
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, ultimately ending with almost 0.2
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 of waste.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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