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The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tons, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.

The graph illustrates acid rain emissions, measured in millions of
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, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.
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, all four sectors faced decline, except transport and communication , which fluctuated throughout
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 period.
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, the electricity, gas and water supply section drastically decreased
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.
Initially
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, electricity, gas and water supply figures showed the highest
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 , which
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 3.4 in 1991. Despite owning the highest initial number, it started to dip in the first 8 years , and by the end of
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1999, it represented just 1
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. After that, it slowly increased by 0.1
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 , but, eventually, in the final
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 , which is 2007, it generated almost 0.5
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. Other industries began with more than 2
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 , and in the following 14 years,
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 gradually descended, eventually ending with 1.4
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1991 transport and communication sector emitted 0.8
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. In the next years, it fluctuated around 1
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. In the final
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, it finished with 0.7
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Domestic
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 figure at the beginning of
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1991 depicted 0.6
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. In the period of time from 1995 to 1998, it remained the same. From 1999, it declined slowly
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, ultimately ending with almost 0.2
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 of waste.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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