Some people believe that teaching children at home is the best for a children's development while others think it is important for children to go to school. Discuss both advantages of each method and give your own opinion.

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individuals
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towards the fact that
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children
could learn the best at
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others
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others'
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competing views on it
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are
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essential for the student to visit the school.I
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completely
agree with
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the former
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idea
that is
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school
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definitely
would
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create
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a suitable
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environment
for learning all
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kinds
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of subjects in order to
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achieve
a
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comprehensive,
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sustainable improvement
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their
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ability. For and
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most
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part,several
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things need to be considered,
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staying at home may prevent any harmful chance
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of getting
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any sort of infectious diseases that may
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be transmitted
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during classroom
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attendance
.
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,being able to study at home could
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the sense of having the leverage of choosing any time or whatever place to study from.A study done by Oxford University in
2022
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after the COVID-19
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pandemic,
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underpins the influence of
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significantly
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, with
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the
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promising results in order to
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a shift in
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the
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schools
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as a result
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,there is a
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statistically
significant modification of the learning creativity
as well as
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the methodology.
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,the idea of going to the
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also
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has its own development vision and mission.
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Nevertheless
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the underlying fact most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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schools
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are establishing a
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learning atmosphere
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,if one of the
student
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students
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are
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not able to understand one of the lesson
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topics,
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some of his/her
friend
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friends
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could eliminate
this
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source of not being able to
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fathom
this
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topic.
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,
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apply
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many
schools
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apply
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our days are following a new
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pattern
which is called problem-solving strategy.
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,
this
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method would create a cooperation between the students
which
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apply
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in order
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to enhace
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enhace
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enhance
their critical
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thinking
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ablilties
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abilities
.
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Ultimately
,
this
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method would create considerable brain
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development
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. In conclusion,l firmly understand
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that both
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of the views are
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complementary
to each other.
In contrast
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,if both of the methods
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collaborated
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very well
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very-well
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very-well,
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that may accentuate the influence on the
chliderns
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children
.

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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a clear view of both sides, then give your own opinion.
coherence
Make a new paragraph for each idea and begin with a topic sentence.
grammar
Use simple grammar and check spellings; do not mix tenses.
content
Give real examples that relate to the point you make.
content
Be clear on your own view and do not switch back and forth.
content
The essay tries to talk about both sides and show some effort to compare.
structure
Some attempt to bring in examples (Oxford study) and a view on school life.
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