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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the cgarts show how it was distributed.

The two diagrams compare the number of
police
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 financial sources and their expenses in
two
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the two
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 years
of
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2017-2018. In general, it reported an increase in budget, with the highest
input
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 coming from
national
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the national
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 government.
Otherwise
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, there was a change in their annual expenditures.
According to
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 the table, it could be observed that
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police
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the police
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 budget increased
around
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by around
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 10
million
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 in 2018.
National
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The national
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 government was consistently the highest source, contributing 175.5
million
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 in 2017,
then
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 rose minimally by 2.3
million
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 to 177.8
million
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 in the following year. The significant rise identified by regional taxes, boosting a fifth of previous
input
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, made it just over 100
million
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 by 2018.
While
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 other
category
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categories
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 contributed the least
input
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 throughout the years. The
input
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inderectly
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indirectly
 influenced the
police
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 spending,
which
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where
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 there was a noticeable change reported in staff wages and technology fulfilment figures. A modest decrease of 6% in salaries shifted for technology investment by 2018, comprising almost double
of
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its original proportion.
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, the output for building maintenance and transportation
set
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 to the same amount of 17% over the years, making it the least of annual
police
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expense
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expenses
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.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, input, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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