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People think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others believe that there are other alternative solutions for reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion on this topic.

Nowadays, there
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 a lot of views about how to
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reduce
crime
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. Some people think that the best way to stop
criminals
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 is to give more years in
prison
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, but other part of individuals think that there are other options to stop the
crime
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. We can discuss
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two opinions from different sides. The majority thinks
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 that the best way to stop
criminals
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 is longer days without freedom. Some people who want to
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commit
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crime
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a crime
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 are afraid of
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the luck
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luck
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 of
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, so on one hand, an option to give longer
prison
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 sentences is a good idea.
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Society
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,
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because
 of the knowledge of the
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consequences
their
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bebehaviour
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behaviour
. And it can help to
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prevent
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a number
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 of crimes. But
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, other humans think that the longer days in
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 not
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enough
, and there
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 other ways to punish
criminals
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. One of the thoughts is life
inprisonment
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imprisonment
. It sounds
more scary
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scarier
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, because
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understanding that you will never leave the
prison
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make
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criminals
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 not
to
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risk
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 to
make
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 something
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dangerous
. I personally agree with the second point of view about life
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imprisonment
. In our days, some people
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 afraid to break the law, because they know that the
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consequences
 are not that scary. But if the punishment is stricter,
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 there is a bigger chance that the criminal won't even try to do something. So
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a
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conclusion, I can say that two points of view have their points, but I support
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that majority
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who
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propose
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 other alternative solutions for reducing
crime
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.

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structure
Make a clear plan: intro with restated topic, two body parts on each view, and a short conclusion with your own view.
task
Explain each point with a short reason and simple example.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas connect.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar, as many words are misspelled.
content
The essay tries to present both sides.
content
An opinion is given.
structure
Intro and conclusion exist.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent
  • habitual offenders
  • retribution
  • rehabilitation
  • overcrowding
  • recidivism
  • community service
  • restorative justice
  • crime prevention programs
  • youth mentorship
  • neighborhood watch
  • justice system
  • re-offending
  • financial strain
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