The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010.

The maps illustrate how the
village
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of Stokeford changed between 1930 and 2010.
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, the
village
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became more developed during the period. Most of the farmland was replaced by houses, and a retirement home was built.
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, some places
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, such
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as the river, the bridge, shops, the post office, and the primary
school
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school,
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stayed the same. In 1930, Stokeford was a small
village
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. There were large areas of farmland to the east and south of the River Stoke. A few houses were located near the shops and the post office in the north-west. There was
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a large house with gardens in the south-east, close to the primary school. By 2010, many new houses had been built
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on the former farmland. Several new streets appeared
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the east of the river and around the primary school. The large house and its gardens were removed and replaced with a retirement home.
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, the bridge remained in the same position. In conclusion, Stokeford changed from a small farming
village
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into a modern place over the
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past 80
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years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demolition
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • urbanization
  • land use
  • farmlands
  • notable buildings
  • layout
  • developments
  • economic growth
  • population growth
  • amenities
  • transformation
  • expansion
  • reconstruction
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