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Band 3

The maps illustrate how the village of Stokeford changed between 1930 and 2010.

the
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The
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 map below demonstrates the
area
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 of
stokeford
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Stokeford
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in
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over
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80 years
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an 80-year
 period.
Linking Words
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Overall
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overall
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overall,
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 it is crystal clear that
,
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apply
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the village
a
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has undergone a
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significant change over
years
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the years
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. New facilities caused
the
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a
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modify
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 in
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city
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the city
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 atmosphere and made it
more
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a more
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 residential
area
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.
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however
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However
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,
post
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the post
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 office and
primary
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the primary
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 school remained
unchange
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unchanged
.
in
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In
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1930
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1930,
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 the stoneword was a small settlement
that
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apply
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surrounded by farmland
by
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on
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 both sides of
village
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the village
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 the bridge at the south
were connecting
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connected
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 the
city
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 over the river. Shops,
large
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a large
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 house and a few houses
located
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are located
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 at different locations
of
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in
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city
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the city
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.
by
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By
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2010
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2010,
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 the farmland
area
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renovated
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had been renovated
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 and changed into
more
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a more
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 complex
residental
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residential
area
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. Extra houses added to
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city
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the city
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 along
highway
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the highway
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 till
bridge
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the bridge
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.
in
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Initially
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initial
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initial,
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 there was a large house which was
devostaded
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devastated
 over the years and replaced with
retirement
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a retirement
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 house.
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Overall
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overall
Punctuation problem
overall,
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 the village became much more populated.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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