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Band 2.5

Millions od dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on the Earth Do you agree or disagree?

In
this
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with
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different
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. Some believe that changing
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 with a good opportunity is better to develop their skills,
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 others believe that changing
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 frequently means making new
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 and surrounding culture too. In
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 essay, I shall elaborate on both sides and lead to a plausible conclusion.
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 will give you a good opportunity to learn new things and get a chance to meet new friends and colleagues . As per my point of view, I strongly agree that changing
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 can give you mental peace. With
new
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partner
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 you can learn several skills,
such
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 a teaching, learning, speaking, reading and so on.
As per
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 means a lot of wasted time. To illustrate
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 the community, people lose their relationships with colleagues when they switch new
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.
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, one more major factor is to change ourselves from a daily routine world. At the final stage, as per my opinion, I firmly believe that the benefits of changing
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 rapidly outweigh the
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 and remain too significant to be overlooked.

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task response
Be clear on your view from the start. State if you think changing job is good or not.
coherence
Use one main idea in each paragraph and explain it.
coherence
Use linking words to show contrast and flow, like 'but', 'however', 'also'.
grammar
Fix grammar and spell errors to help meaning.
content
Give specific example for each point, not general words.
content
The essay tries to talk about both sides.
structure
There is an intro and a last line to show plan.
language
Some ideas are easy to read.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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